Writing Riot

Reaction to Adversities – Selina, Grade 12

This inquiry essay is written by one of my grade 12 students. She has an interesting hook-clincher strategy, starting the essay with an analogy and ending it with the same analogy. In order to explore the issue, she draws on a number of resources, including some TED talks and the ISU novel. She also makes some valid connections to herself and to the world, which makes the essay very reflective in nature. Finally, she sums up the essay by providing an insightful qualitative comment, which requires some deliberation on the part of the readers.

Pablo Neruda – Ben Grade 10 IB

This comparative commentary is written by one of my grade 10 IB students. The essay focuses on Pablo Neruda’s poems, exploring his stance on communism. Three literary devices, namely symbolism, metaphor, and diction, are specifically pointed out as the textual elements that Neruda has applied in his poems to establish his position in favor of communism. Above all, each element has been elaborated on, convincing the readers of Neruda’s standpoint.

Banning Cell Phones – Angela ESL-E Grade 9

This standard five-paragraph essay is written by one of my ESL-E grade 9 students. She has clearly mentioned her subtopics in a parallel structure in the introduction. She has also followed the rules of unity and coherence, discussing only one issue per paragraph. Each paragraph also begins with a short clear topic sentence. Each point also is supported by a number of specific examples and details, which makes the essay very convincing. Finally, she ends the essay by making an appeal to all teenagers to put away their cell phones and live a healthy life.

Raising Empathy – Sabrina, IELTS Student

This standard five-paragraph essay is written by one of my IELTS students. She has an interesting hook-clincher strategy, starting the essay with the Syrian boy and finishing it with the same image. Also, she proposes three different strategies, which can be used to raise empathy and compassion in people. Finally, she successfully includes specific examples and details to back up her points, which makes the essay very convincing.

Banning Homework – Leila, IELTS Student

This standard inquiry format essay is written by one of my IELTS students. She has written a general statement as the hook, which is a wise technique when writing an examination. The writer does not mention her thesis in the introduction in order to follow the prompt requirement, which asks for the discussion of both views before presenting a personal point of view. She adequately discusses both sides, tilting a bit towards the proponents in order to prepare the readers for her stance on the issue. Finally, she clearly presents her position on this issue in the conclusion. The essay contains 281 words.

The Lullaby

Inspired by the joy of watching my 11-month old daughter fall asleep in my arms, I decided to write this personal narrative. Embellished with imagery and a number of other literary devices, such as the occasional use of rhythm and rhyme, the narrative reflects the ambivalent feelings that parents might …

Story of a Motion – Tim, Grade 7

This short story is written by one of my grade 7 students. It has an incredibly touching theme, which resonates with lovely moms. The theme is revealed right at the end, creating a sense of suspense that you would enjoy when you read the story. There is a lot of imagery and characterization in this 671-word short story, which does make it fun to read. Finally, the title, including a homophone, is an absolutely fitting title as you can read it in two ways, both of which make great sense.