Category: IELTS Essays
Time to Change – Tina, Grade 10
This argumentative essay is written by one of my grade 10 students. She persuasively argues that all drugs need to be decriminalized and points to some of the successful models from around the world as proof. She has included many facts, examples, and statistics, which make her piece a very …
Factors Affecting Job Performance – Leila, IELTS Student
This graph description is written by one of my IELTS students. She has written a concise and organized description of the task without interpreting the data. She has started by introducing the graph and one of the main ideas. She has not only compared the various factors but also has …
Raising Empathy – Sabrina, IELTS Student
This standard five-paragraph essay is written by one of my IELTS students. She has an interesting hook-clincher strategy, starting the essay with the Syrian boy and finishing it with the same image. Also, she proposes three different strategies, which can be used to raise empathy and compassion in people. Finally, she successfully includes specific examples and details to back up her points, which makes the essay very convincing.
Banning Homework – Leila, IELTS Student
This standard inquiry format essay is written by one of my IELTS students. She has written a general statement as the hook, which is a wise technique when writing an examination. The writer does not mention her thesis in the introduction in order to follow the prompt requirement, which asks for the discussion of both views before presenting a personal point of view. She adequately discusses both sides, tilting a bit towards the proponents in order to prepare the readers for her stance on the issue. Finally, she clearly presents her position on this issue in the conclusion. The essay contains 281 words.